College Essay Rough Draft Paragraph

In school we are starting to develop our college essays that we are going to hopefully have all ready for when we start doing our applications to schools and this is a paragraph that I was working with in my essay;

On my first day of school at The Academy of Arts, Careers and Technology I was in amazement at what was before me. I was in the second class in the school’s history for being able to AACT for four years. I was at that moment knows as a classmate of the 2014 class graduates. It was amazing being able to go to AACT. I was in the Engineering Academy at the school but I was also trying other academy classes. I was learning from teachers out of the book and also learning hands on in the lab classes that they offered. One day I would be in the bike shop learning about how to rebuild bikes and the next I was in the million dollar kitchen and bakery learning new skills. I was given the skills to do welding and metal working along with architecture and drafting. I was given the knowledge about being a graphic designer and how to be and animator. I was learning things that my parents could have learned in college and it has made me ready for my future. I was love my school and everyone in it, I am proud that I took the path less chosen and so were my parents. Every time someone would ask me where I was going to school when I said that I wasn’t at Robert McQueen High School I would say AACT. I was more than happy to tell people about my school and afterwards their response would be “I wish they had schools like that when I was growing up.”